Descriptive Writing Exercise

Descriptive Writing Exercise

For each of the following three sentences, I want you to write a 75 word paragraph that “shows” instead of “tells.” (See handout in D2L.)

1.      She was depressed.

Her heart felt heavy and dark. Her eyes were like the cold grey skies of a dreary long winter, swollen like clouds filled with rain about to burst. The Shades in her room were drawn and the lights were off as she listened to the same sad song over and over, that gave her a lump in her throat and mad her insides want to rupture. It was an overwhelming feeling of torrent as the record played quietly and crackled in the room. She pulled the sheets over her head, only to try to sleep and pray she never wakes up.

2.      The car was nice.

As I entered the sales floor of the luxurious automobiles, one really caught my eye. This car had all the bells and whistles. The outside appearance looked glossy, a sleek dark green with chrome pinstripes and molding like I’ve never seen before. It was almost dreamlike. It took on the shape of an U.F.O of some sort. The interior was even more extraordinary. Instead of a steering wheel, there was a headset that you put on like virtual reality goggles. There was a black onyx sphere in the center of the console where all you had to do is think of a song, or radio station and it would play. You could also control the heat, air, and get directions. The seats were a thin strip that molded to your body like a Saran wrap hammock. It had a garbage disposal unit in the middle between both seats. It did not run on gasoline. Nor did it run on water, or oil. The best part about this vehicle, it ran off of human emotions. You were this vessel’s battery.